Date: 19 Mar 2013 - 08:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Marvelous tale told well! did find a 'me' where a 'my' should be, and a 'me' that got missed in editing, so I'd suggest more proofreading; but it wasn't enough to detract from your talent much. My honest opinion is that this is a much longer and detailed story that has had its summary posted. You've got skill...show us all what'chya got girlfriend.